While the family was talking happily, suddenly a cold voice sounded from outside. “Try to get rid of them.” Lan Lin Sheng snorted coldly. He definitely wouldn’t let Li Juan Rong mess with Ting’er’s wedding, let alone letting the people from Xiaoyao Mountain Villa look down on her. “Yes, Master.” Lan Lin Sheng looked at his four Mistresses and several ...
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My Fantasy World has an interesting concept, and is going strong but the only bummer is the update pace
Style:
Again, the concept of someone inheriting the power to create a world has an incredible amount of potential. It’s clear that the author does have a plan for the overarching story. it’s potential is vast and the Author is doing a good job in contructing it’s foundation.
Story:
I understand that at the time of this review it’s still early days for this work.
Grammar:
Typos, punctuation mistakes, are rare, but there are some sentences that just make no sense, etc or a bit hard to chew.
Spoiler
I let the small orbs of light go and I flew back and said ”let there be light.” And the white orbs of light grew bigger and bigger ten times, a hundred times bigger, even more, and it finally stops. It was now the size of the earth-moon, I reach closer to the light and I touch it and it envelops my hand, I didn’t feel heat nor did I feel cold it didn’t feel like anything. It was just pure light with no purpose, so with a thought, I send red energy into the white orbs of light.
This show the creativity of the Author in world building.
Character:
There are some characters in the story so far. Some of them are well written. It’s obvious the author attempted to add nuance to one, while setting up some character growth in the second. There are some nameless background characters.
Give this story a try. Read till chapter 14.
From one of reader