This is a fan fic and admitted as such by the author. It reads like one as well, ive seen writing get better with more chapters a book has so its not all lost. However because its a Ff the world building isnt really there at the beginning you just get tossed in, most deginner ff writers do this, i call it excitment amnesia where they dont world build because theyre writing about an already established world they know of and forget others dont know this world so it carries down the quality of their writing. The author seems open to comments that help so mine would be to slow down, make the mc’s reaction more realistic, he gets tossed into a new world and just accepts it. Dont skip him being confused and finding information to questions he has even if itll take a few more words it builds a better story.
This is a fan fic and admitted as such by the author. It reads like one as well, ive seen writing get better with more chapters a book has so its not all lost. However because its a Ff the world building isnt really there at the beginning you just get tossed in, most deginner ff writers do this, i call it excitment amnesia where they dont world build because theyre writing about an already established world they know of and forget others dont know this world so it carries down the quality of their writing. The author seems open to comments that help so mine would be to slow down, make the mc’s reaction more realistic, he gets tossed into a new world and just accepts it. Dont skip him being confused and finding information to questions he has even if itll take a few more words it builds a better story.